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 Blog Buddies Journalism PEER COMMENT FORM

Name (link of the blog): https://akadeumiya.wordpress.com/2023/07/17/a-2000s-never-ending-love-story-first-love-2022-review/

Journalism Class: 6A2

Topic: News Stories (Review movie)

Commentator: Camella Citra Fortina |2088203093|6A2

Complete sentences The presentation consists of well-structured and complete sentences throughout. Each sentence effectively conveys a clear idea, and there are no sentence fragments or run-on sentences. The presentation includes mostly complete sentences, with only a few instances of sentence fragments or run-on sentences that do not significantly impact the overall understanding of the content. The presentation has some noticeable instances of sentence fragments or run-on sentences, but they do not substantially detract from the overall coherence of the material.

The presentation contains numerous and significant sentence fragments or run-on sentences that may affect the clarity and comprehension of the presentation.

Correct use of capitalization The presentation demonstrates a flawless and consistent use of capitalization throughout. Capital letters are appropriately used at the beginning of sentences, for proper nouns, titles, and other instances as required. The presentation shows strong usage of capitalization, with only a few minor errors that do not significantly detract from the overall professionalism and clarity of the content.

The presentation has some noticeable capitalization errors, but they do not substantially impact the overall understanding of the material. The presentation contains numerous and significant capitalization errors that may affect the presentation's professionalism and coherence.

• My peer assessment comment on news writings contents (Give the link of your friend’s news writing blog) Elaborate each element contents of news writing in sentences based on this table.

Well-stated author in by line The byline of your film review clearly states the author's name in a professional and easily identifiable manner. It gives a strong sense of authorship and adds credibility to the review. The byline of your film review effectively presents the author's name, but there may be slight room for improvement in terms of format or presentation. The byline of your film review adequately states the author's name, but it could be enhanced to better reflect the author's identity and style. The byline of your film review lacks clarity or fails to effectively present the author's name, which may impact the review's credibility.

Use a logical plan (4w+h) in the lead. The lead of your film review effectively incorporates the 4W+H elements in a well-structured and captivating manner. It provides essential information about the movie, such as who stars in it, what the movie is about, when it was released, where the story is set, and how it unfolds, all while enticing the reader to continue reading. The lead of your film review includes the 4W+H elements, but there is room for slight improvement in terms of clarity or coherence. Nevertheless, it succeeds in capturing the reader's attention and providing key details about the movie.

The lead of your film review contains some of the 4W+H elements, but it could be more effectively structured to provide a clearer and more comprehensive overview of the film. The lead of your film review lacks a logical plan (4W+H), and it may not effectively convey the necessary information to hook the reader and set the stage for the review

Existed quotation with correct capitalization, grammar, & mark The film review includes quotations that are perfectly integrated into the text. The capitalization, grammar, and punctuation marks within the quotations are all accurate and align with the context seamlessly. The film review incorporates quotations effectively, with only minor errors in capitalization, grammar, or punctuation marks. These errors do not significantly affect the overall readability or clarity of the review.

The film review includes quotations, but there are noticeable errors in capitalization, grammar, or punctuation marks. These errors may slightly impact the flow or understanding of the content The film review contains numerous and significant errors in capitalization, grammar, or punctuation marks within the quotations, making them challenging to comprehend or disrupting the overall structure of the review.

Well-ended with insightful messages to

the viewers/readers The conclusion of your film review is exceptionally well-crafted, providing insightful and thought-provoking messages to the readers. It effectively summarizes the key points of the review and offers valuable takeaways or reflections on the movie's themes or impact. The conclusion of your film review is solid, offering some insightful messages to the readers. It briefly summarizes the main aspects of the review and leaves the readers with thoughtful considerations about the film. The conclusion of your film review is decent, but it could be improved to deliver more powerful insights or messages to the readers. It may benefit from offering a clearer summary and deeper reflections on the film's significance. The conclusion of your film review lacks strong insights or messages to the readers, making it feel abrupt or disconnected from the rest of the review.

A pretty good flow of ideas from topic sentence to details in sequence Your film review demonstrates an exceptional flow of ideas from the topic sentence to supporting details. The content is impeccably organized, with a logical progression of thoughts that leads the readers through the review effortlessly. Your film review shows a strong flow of ideas, with only minor instances where the sequence of details could be further improved for even smoother transitions between paragraphs or sections. Your film review has a decent flow of ideas, but there are noticeable areas where the organization could be strengthened for a clearer connection between the topic sentence and supporting details. Your film review lacks a coherent flow of ideas, making it challenging for readers to follow the logical sequence from the topic sentence to the supporting details.

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